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Hobbet
Sir Postalot
Joined: 11 Oct 2002
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 Posted: 04/27/03 - 19:47 Post subject: The Adventures of Jorbaph
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One time Jorbaph was running down the hall to his class because he was tardy. It was your typical spring day, sunny, hot and his allergies were acting up again. Little did Jorbaph know that he was going to be changed forever on this very day. Jorbaph walked into his class already thinking of an excuse when suddenly he realized all the people in his class were not there, their bodies(it seemed) sitting in a pool of blood at the back corner of the classroom.
Run, thought Jorbaph, Run and dont turn around but something was louring him to the back corner of blood. When he got there, which seemed eternity, he realized that the heads were the only thing in the pile and everything else seemed to be missing. Thougts were racing through his head. At the very moment he haerd the closet door creep open he realized what had happened. He remembered the tales of the past his mother used to tell them of the great Warrior JonJon defeating this foe. Jorbaph knew they waited in the darkness untill they were made into a myth by the years to attack the world again. One Eyed One Armed Flying Purple People Eaters.
To be continued....
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Hobbet Productions
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Booker
RealPoor Guru
Joined: 12 Oct 2002
Posts: 2562
Location: Corvallis, Oregon
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Posted: 04/27/03 - 21:05 Post subject:
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TOO MUCH SUSPENSE ONG!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!111111!!!
WILL JORBATH DEFEAT THE FOES?
WILL JORBATH DIE IN A BLOOD SOAKED FRENZY?
WILL LITTLE JOHNNY GET HIS MILK MONEY BACK FROM THE BULLY?!?
NEXT TIME ON HOBBETPIECE THEATRE!
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atarom
Dalai Lama of RealPoor
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Location: 375th st. Y
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Posted: 04/28/03 - 00:52 Post subject:
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sounds like a jorb well done.
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Clevinger
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Location: Austin
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Posted: 04/28/03 - 01:19 Post subject:
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word
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Occulis
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Location: Moral Relativity Central
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Posted: 04/28/03 - 01:28 Post subject:
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I'm going to quote the part you are good with:
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One time Jorbaph was running down the hall to his class because he was tardy. It was your typical spring day, sunny, hot and his allergies were acting up again. Little did Jorbaph know that he was going to be changed forever on this very day. Jorbaph walked into his class already thinking of an excuse when suddenly he realized all the people in his class were not there, their bodies(it seemed) sitting in a pool of blood at the back corner of the classroom.
Run, thought Jorbaph, Run and dont turn around but something was louring him to the back corner of blood. When he got there, which seemed eternity, he realized that the heads were the only thing in the pile and everything else seemed to be missing. Thougts were racing through his head. At the very moment he haerd the closet door creep open he realized what had happened.
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Cut out this b******t:
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remembered the tales of the past his mother used to tell them of the great Warrior JonJon defeating this foe. Jorbaph knew they waited in the darkness untill they were made into a myth by the years to attack the world again. One Eyed One Armed Flying Purple People Eaters.
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Had some suspense and a great story potential until you became self-conscious and intentionally f****d it up near the end.
Please continue the story about Jorbaph!
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atarom
Dalai Lama of RealPoor
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Location: 375th st. Y
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Posted: 04/28/03 - 02:04 Post subject:
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lol busloads of f**k.
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r00typooh
RealPoor Master of Posts
Joined: 11 Oct 2002
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Location: Miami, FL
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Posted: 04/28/03 - 02:12 Post subject:
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he's not even an archanist =/
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Hobbet
Sir Postalot
Joined: 11 Oct 2002
Posts: 1345
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Posted: 04/28/03 - 19:49 Post subject:
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Ya Dunn, I actually added in that part after I wrote the whole thing. Ill think twice next time. Jorbaph will continure
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-Reneloth-
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Joined: 11 Oct 2002
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Location: Dallas, TX
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Posted: 04/28/03 - 22:14 Post subject:
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JORBAPH NOW!
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atarom
Dalai Lama of RealPoor
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Location: 375th st. Y
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Posted: 04/30/03 - 01:33 Post subject:
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wtf. jorbaph? when?
the people demand it.
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Paden
RealPoor Master of Posts
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Location: North CAROLINA!
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Posted: 04/30/03 - 12:39 Post subject:
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i bet it rapes him
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Fluxus the Rogue
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Posted: 04/30/03 - 12:58 Post subject:
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I bet he will remember that he wasn't running through the hall 10 minutes ago. He was eating bisquits with mustard while slinging his kaiser blade. umm hmm.
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Clevinger
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Posted: 04/30/03 - 14:10 Post subject:
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MORE JORBAPH DAMMIT
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Clevinger
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Posted: 02/15/06 - 03:23 Post subject:
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bump ^^
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